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mystirious eyes

comment from my blog reader................................due to some problem......my blog comments are not working..........

Hi,
First of all let me take this opportunity to thank you for your kind mail.
I have read the series of mysterious eyes in your other blog.
I tried posting a comment but sadly when i click the post a comment link it does not open. I tried it several times, but the result was still sad, it did not open.
anyhow i thought of leaving you this message from my heart. The story is wonderful and your style of story telling is fantastic. I do not know how you can do this magic of holding the mystery so sweetly till the end. The article is beyond any imagination. fantastic, great and very captivating.............please continue to develop your skills in story telling.....keep going and i am sure you will be great soon.
such is the impact of your writings that I feel a desire to see you sometime, atleast to know that fantastic mind.
i shall stop here for now. you may attend to my mail in your leisure.
till then
i remain
if you allow
to be a friend and admirer
sarat

the mysterious eyes.............[4]

[HEY FRIENDS THIS IS THE LAST PART OF MY STORY.OTHER PARTS CAN BE READ IN THE EARLIER POSTS]

IT WAS GOING TO BE THE END OF MY LIFE................

AAAAAA!!!!!!!! i woke up!!!!!!! my mother was again....sitting beside me.......

water!!!!!!!!water ...........my mother brought the glass of cold water hastily...........and i drank the same manner...[hastily]........dear maria what had happened to you..................i found you fainted..........again....................you told me.........that you were going for a walk...but how you fainted......?????.....that time i could not able to utter a word as i was very nervous and scared then..........

WELL DEAR HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!!!!!!!

HEY!!!!!!!!yeah today was 30.5.09.and my pretty birthday.........i jumped out of the bed...and turned the calender..........yippppppppppeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!........but the smile faded from my face as the dream of that old woman......with the mysterious silver eyes.........was..........oh god..........


i went for a bath........and wore my loveliest frock..........eating my breakfast......including s of juice and my favourite yummy desert....butterscotch..............


Maria.....................yes!!!! mom.........beta,i am busy for the preparations for your birthday party tonight...........go and give invitation cards to you friends......... .....i took my basket and purse.......and went off

i plucked some.....flowers and ...............put them in my basket........then again.......

M...A...R..I...A...... fainted...voice of......that old woman of my dreams....was coming forward........i rubbed..my ..eyes but this time i was not dreaming........that old woman.......started speaking to me.........

I AM MIKOYAN....I WAS SEARCHING for you...........i want you to tell something........come with me........i followed her like a tail.........she stopped near a church.........MARIA......come ,......come maria......but........but.[i spoke feebly]..........don't be afraid come come here........we entered inside the church............MIKOYAN.......BROUGHT AN ANCIENT PHOTOGRAPH......CLEANING IT....she showed it to me................

 I SCREAMED..in a shock...............AAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!......IT WAS MY PHOTOGRAPH...............
MIKOYAN it is my photo[ i told her].......but why this photo is signed.??.......Mikol..........[i asked her]

dear Maria.......[.Mikoyan...moved forward.......with her back.....in front of me]

                                                           the story began......


long years ago there was a child.........very beautiful child.....MIKOL.......[she paused]

.........yes Mikoyan proceed.... proceed i am listening.........

Mikol was a small child..........one black Saturday.........she was..............going in search of the food.......and was captured............by the women....of that forest..........

.Mikol had the beautiful pairs of silver eyes......and those women were searching for the same pairs......for their rituals..,,,,,women were in need of the silver eyes...to offer them to their god in the temple of that forest......very.............[.MIKOYAN WAS SOBBING]........they took out the her beautiful eyes harshly....WITH A SCALPEL.....and thrown her.........[Mikoyan screamed].........she died of staving.........she died.........[she screamed again].....and you know Maria......that forest is now.... a YARD....THAT YOU VISITED......


i was almost dead........but why are you telling me??? all this[ i asked]

dear Maria you know mikol was my daughter........a-and when she......it was 30th may that is today, she died....when you were born maria..when you were born.....after her death you were born............!!!!!!

SUDDENLY.................
the woman dissapeared...........i walked around the church........and read.......on the wall. it said,: ''Mikoyan and Mikol two young souls..will remain always in our heart............even after their deaths''

nooooooooo[i screamed]
whom i was talking till now?????

MARIA............MY MOTHER WAS STANDING IN FRONT OF ME.........WHAT HAPPENED....?????..

WHY ARE U HERE in this church .........hmmmm!!!!!!i looked around THE CHURCH their was no one.... and that church was..........filled with the webs.............

my mother took me home......and told me that....this church was destroyed several years...back during a war..................echoes of my mother's voice........can still be heard......the church was.................to.............and why...........................................................[and all]





after the night's party.........i looked myself into the mirror........my silver eyes were.....shining..........brightly..................and the secret story,''the mysterious eyes''...........no longer
continued.........NOW NO DREAM CAN BE SEEN.........AND NO YARD WAS MY  VI SITINGS.....



[hey friends it was the end of the story......i hope you liked it....IN THIS STORY I WAS MARIA.......]



AUTHOR: SHILPI

PLS LEAVE YOU VALUABLE COMMENTS BELOW........

THE MYSTERIOUS EYES.....................[3]

 [HEY.....friends below is the 3 part of my story......the 2nd and the 1st parts can be read on my older posts]


hhhh!!!!!!!!.......i saw a dark figure coming towards me.......it was......almost 7:35pm........therefore... i could not judge the figure.......

MARIA..AGAIN..........H!!!h!!!!h!!!!!! the voice was coming closer to me........and closer...and closer......i tried to run but my legs freezed to the ground.......h.....AND.......a tall old woman flashed out......of the dark wearing a white Saree......with red borders.......her back was slightly bended.......and her face was fully and horribly......wrinkled..........she blewed out the candle in her hand...........nothing but her giant SILVER..eyes....could be seen...............,,.......

how did you know my name.........i asked in a slow tone......BUT the old woman said nothing just lightened her candle.......and went off......aaoooooooch!!!!!!! one piece of her white Saree.... tucked to jacket.....but i ignored it...........i could see the woman dissapearing behind the wild trees......i sec!!!!!! THE WILD TREES.............YARD............HMMMMMMM POSTERS.......oh my god she was going the same.......oh god.......[i thought]......then....i followed her.....I started running to catch her soon..................

as soon i reached that yard........where i fainted on seeing those posters......................SHOCKING...........no yard..........no posters.........i huffed in terror.........INSTEAD THE YARD AND THE POSTERS..........there stood a ''LARGE HAUNTED HOUSE''  i was shocked.........i rubbed my eyes again and again.......YES IT IS THAT YARD ONLY WHERE MY BUS DROVE.......ME.....[I THOUGHT CONFIDENTLY].........slowly and slowly i moved forward.......oh!!!!!!! there's that woman....yeah!!!!!! i could see her.........see her.......i ran fastly.......more faster........and faster.......but what??........the house was so.......far.............i moved and the house moved[backward]...........i stopped.there...huffing !!!!!!!! hhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!huh!! huh!!!!!!


i closed my eyes for a moment and MEOW........MEOW...........the voices all over me..........silver eyed CATS COVERED ME............i was about to faint in the terror.........but..........what was that.... that white Saree women again flashed out....but this time she flashed out from; between those cats......

HE HI HIIIIIEEEEEEE...........YOU STUPID GIRL...YOU SILLY PEST.........YOU KNOW WHAT YOU DID....................YOU WERE TYING TO FIGURE OUT THE EYES YOU SAW IN YOUR DREAMS AND WHILE WALKING THAT YARD.......YOU SAW THEM........now girl.......you are in a trouble......


the women whistled and the white bodied creatures.......with blood coming out of their face........tied me to the rope.........
NOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!! YOU CAN'T DO THAT!!!!!!    
HA HA HA [the woman cried]........

those monsters were taking me to that yard.....................noooooooooo!!!!! help OH
!!!! MY GOD HELP...............,,,,,,,I PLEADED FOR A HELP........but......no one was there to help me.........
i was remembering my mother.......as now it was my last trip.......and......'THE END OF M......


[will they kill maria or the mystery of the eyes be solved????..........[to be continued!!!]




THANKS
AUTHOR: SHILPI



PLS.. LEAVE YOUR VALUABLE COMMENTS BELOW

the mysterious eyes..............[2]

[Hey friends..........below is the 2nd part of my story ''the mysterious eyes'' u can read the first part below this post......i want you to read it silently.........the story will go lil' longer..i think it will be of 4 or 5 parts........]


 I....OPENED MY EYES...hh!!...slowly very s..l..o..w.l.y.....and found myself lying on a bed........oh!! it was my bed!!!.....................my mother was sitting beside me........with her pale face....watching me.....and her soft hands touching my forehead....again and again.............i could see a person wearing a white coat with the stethoscope around his neck...picked up his bag and disspeared behind the curtain...........
MOM.WHATS????............my mom touched her finger against........ my lips and said to me:don't speak anything.....u
need rest.....your dad is out of station....when i found you not back home at the right time......i went on searching for you...after.1hour i saw you lying 2 yards back.......from the home.i picked you up......and lied you inside the car and then i drove the car back home.......ah!!!! mother stopped taking a long b....breath.......dear......why??? i told you not to go to that yard.... hundreds of times...and u.........but mom!!!!!!!! please dear........no words..you need rest ok.?.....i will talk you .........tomorrow morning.........now common !!!!don't worry i am with you ...come dear drink this soup..your favorite......cabbage soup..........mom i don't.........drink it dear.........you will....feel.........better!!!!!!!

After drinking the soup........i slept down......my mom hugged me.....shut the lights off.......goodnight baby.sweet dreams..........good...night mom.......goodnight.....after that i didn't not saw my mom anymore and closed my eyes......


SUDDENLY........THOSE SILVER EYES................WERE  LAUGHING AT ME.......I WILL KILL YOU KILL YOU..........HA! !HA !!HA.!!................NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!

I SCREAMED...................AH !!!!AH!!!AH!!!!!!!I WOKE UP HUFFING..................oh!! how horrible that dream was!!!!!! i glanced the watch....it was 7:00 at the morning.................my mother came rushing towards me after hearing my SCream.........what happened??...wh....?????...........nothing mom[i interrupted.......] nothing.......... just a bad dream.........
i am going to take my bath........!!!ok dear go..........you will feel fresh,, ,,, . yeah!!!!                  
rest of my day went out quietly nothing much happened that day......
my friends,..........oh!!!! no friends at home.......only at school.................it was then 6:00 at that ice cold....bone chilling afternoon,,,,..................i told my mom and went out for a walk.....................................................................................
whaoooo!!!!!! such a beautiful afternoon it was.....i tied my cap tightly against my hairs...to prevent the dew drops........after taking a long nature walk........i felt better........and i almost forgot that incident!!!!!!!
and then............it grew darker and darker..........i decided to go  home...... while moving towards home.....i can see those dark wild trees...and..............HEY WAIT.....SHHHH!!

M  ,........A.R IA............................a sharp voice SCREAMED..................I MOVED BACKWARDS.............NOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!I SAW...........GOSH I SAW A .............



  [what is the mystery behind..the eyes?......which the author always dream t of and always saw........
...to know.

wait for the next part of this story.........and please be patient with this story....... i know till now there was nothing much interesting, but.....it is just a start-up of the story .........the interesting part will come soon to you......may be in the next post.....till then happy reading and........don't forget to leave your valuable comment below]
 
.

thanks
author:  shilpi

the mysterious eyes

YESTERDAY

, after the school my bus drove me 2 yards far from my house.oh!! it was totally annoying but what to do? there was a GIANT dig over the path  so, the bus can't proceed anymore further and with my frail face and my back aching with the heavy bag with loads of books.... i moved down the bus.....

.......it was a hot sunny Saturday noon, i took out my kerchief' from the pocket of my blue blazer... and watched my bus dissapearing....behind those dark,wild trees. Softly i cleaned my sweated forehead...and moved further.....the path was totally deserted.....no person not even a single man can be seen that BLACK Saturday afternoon....

.....i was walking HAVING just A one thought in my mind that something was very strange that i cannot conclude...         then

. i moved little bit further......hoping to reach my Mom faster..... 

I SAW ONE WOMEN WITH LOOSENED HAIRS ON ONE OF THE YARD'S BUILDING........CLOSING HER BLACK WINDOW AND HER silver eyes were staring me....;,until she closed her window completely.... almost dissapearing......

SUDDENLY...WAIT.....SHSSSSSSHH!!

tap....tap.and tapped.....someone was following.....i turned my poor head backward ................................it was nothing but a black CAT with SILVER EYES staring me..........I was sweating more than I EVER.did ...and i fastened my steps....and prayed god for my safe home landing.........moving little bit more further ..... wait!!!

GOSH!! WHAT WAS THAT?? again i turned backward and oh!! i shooked my head.... it was nothing but a big bannana leaf which felled down form the huge bannana tree blocking the path..........i again fastened my steps........and watched my wrist clock......it was almost 2:15 at the noon and i was late..Normally i use to reach my home before 2:00pm but today......ah!!!!!

 I moved....now my home was just 1 yard further.........

while walking steadily with my arms tightened against my bag's strips and my straight face but eyes staring those dirty poster's on those dirty bare walls of that yard........the POSTER'S  said wanted and another again wanted and wanted........but what's that it was the very strange poster of a very strange man in his early 30s with bald head and beared....AND--- AND OH GOD!! his VERY HORRIBLE STRANGE SILVER EYES........i almost fainted..... my heart was beating fast i could read the poster [THIS IS A STRANGE MAN WHO CHANGES.............h......] OH! i haven't read anymore further!!! .....and i couldn't walk further.......oh!!!!! 

 I GOT FAINTED............................!!!!!!

[ hey friends the above story was my imagination and nothing else......i will continue this story of the 'mysterious eyes' further in my next post..till then happy reading and please leave your valuable comments below,AND I WANT YOU TO READ THE ABOVE STORY AGAIN,SILENTLY,WITH A SOFT WHISPER AND ALONE]

thanks

shilpi

beiginning of the new leaf.....

;I was not much of taht .....computer girl or a net surfer.....i got my pc when i was in class 8th [i am in class9th presently]...... and discovered many new things when my pc got connected to the internet......
                                               
                                              lets get 4 years younger

i was a simple and a passionate girl......; like any other girl child i also was passionate about drawings,
shopping s,dancing and playing with various......sort of beads,flowers and others.......
i  used to be.............hm mm!! yeah!! i was used to be said as a 90%ter and i loved that and nothing else, and not much was wanted in my life.......but i used to narrate the paragraphs to my brother
and that was all........
!!!

i remember when my brother and i were in different schools[now its same]....... and i was in class 5th and my bro was in class 2nd......... my parents used to regularly attend our PTMs.........[ in my brother's school, during PTMs].... there used to be book strolls.......various stories and poetry books were there......
i was the one who love to see those book covers[when i used attend my brother's PTMs with my parents]...
i loved to see those pretty drawings on those covers of various story books............
i started collecting those books includings of story,rhymes,coloring pages and much more.......but never read them,just kept seeing those cover,colourful covers......!!!!!!!!

                      how i got that beautiful habit of reading 


one day i was sitting sparely in front of the tv...... i can make out the picture of me....... i was wearing a pyajama and a tee of some colour........on the sofa...i was sitting cross legged........sort of.......yeah!!.....getting bored
i took out newpaper from under the table...... turned its pages and kept it back; but this time on the table........

ah!!!!!!!!!! i was really getting bored......that stupid serial was going on the tv...then i moved my hand under the table,blindly and discovered the book of moral value stories........which i bought from that storll. wow!!!!!! 
i turned its pages and took out the most beautiful page........
it said 'the helpful ant'....... 
hey freinds!!!!
i hope u have heard that moral story of ant and the dove......... yeah it was that only!!!!!!!
i started reading it.......once upon a time.......................and finnally, i don't how but still came to the last line of the story which said: helping hand will give u back a helping hand!!!!!! 
and wow!!!! it was a fantastic story........
and i started reading the next one and the next and the next and again that process continued..... untill i had finished the whole book.....it was fantastic adventure of reading a whole book......
.great!!!!!! 
i told my father.... that i had read the whole book and from that day; my life hooked on to the books...

to the very next day i read the whole of oliver twist and then witty stories of Tenali Rama and so on............
then i attemped to write stories[they were not very good as they are today]
i writed poems,simple poems..........taht was the beginning of the new leaf in my life.......



                                                     lets come to the present


yeah..........in between i left writing........infact i forget it.........but now i have a pc with net and when i came across a blog i decided to make one and from that day my writings started again.....and now my poems are appreciated by all.........


one day my frnd Astha showed me collections of her poems.......i get inspired by her and made my very own diary of poems...........
today i have the coleection of 11 novels, i have read 20 novels till now........ 
my fav. novel: twilight



                                

                                  i created my own: steps of writing poems


 1. make a rough darft of your poem in your diary........
2. then use microsoft word to type your rough poem.....
3. use net.........the rhyming dic. ..........
4. edit and read your poem untill it become perfect rhythemic  piece
5.before attempting writing poems read various ther poems from other writer's collections.....
        all the best!!!!!!!:)

          
                                               one of my poems


                  'thats what shilpi is like'
            

Brace of twinkling eyes

Akin to blonde moon

That’s the best of my boon,

Cute, white face

It is a mysterious maze

For which long you have to chase.

Long brown hairs

Precious are my tears

And for my loved ones

I can wait for the years

A neat heart,

Persona so smart

My answering eyes

Crush on me, Of Several guys

Cause; My nature so wise

And some day till sky, I will arise….

Meaning of my name:

The architect

And I will surely,

Make out of myself the best!

author: shilpi